He is surrounded by people, but he stands alone.
He screams for help, but nobody hears him.
Nobody's listening.
He doesn't understand why no one even turns his way.
He pounds at anything he can reach, but nobody sees him.
Nobody's looking.
He's starting to doubt if he even really exists.
His throat runs dry. His fists turn numb.
He collapses onto the floor.
Just something random I wrote, any feedback/constructive criticism ? :)
Absolutely delighted to see one of us writing poetry - bring it on!! I like this a lot, but I think you need to work on the ending..not sure you need those last two lines..and there's probably a few other redundant words that can be pruned
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